Writing game 3.
He was
laying flat on the road looking right up in the skies, and for a short moment I
feared that he was dead. I jumped out of my car and ran over to the boy on the
road.
- “Hey boy, are you alright?” I yelled.
- “Know not
do I. Mean this does what”. He just mumbled and I figured that he must have hit
his head very hard.
- “You ran
out in front of my car,” I said.
- “Please
home the call don’t,” He mumbled
- “Sorry I
didn’t get that, who should I call?” I said and took my phone out of my pocket
- “Don’t,”
He yelled and grabbed my arm very hard.
- “I think
it might be best if I call an ambulance, then we can get a doctor to look at
your head”.
- “Them
call just will they ambulance no,” he yelled again, but I called 911 anyway.
I like how you work a setting to make the backwards sentences work. It works well and the conflict between helping and respecting someone's wishes becomes apparent.
ReplyDeleteIt works very well
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you are using the backwards sentences
ReplyDeleteI wanna read more of that short story!
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